# First impressions, part two

**URL:** <https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/t/first-impressions-part-two/147>\
**Category:** Forum feedback\
**Created:** [May 4, 2017, 3:12am UTC](https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/t/first-impressions-part-two/147 "2017-05-04T03:12:37Z")\
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**Author:** ![grahamperrin](https://yyz1.discourse-cdn.com/flex029/user_avatar/discourse.opensourcedesign.net/grahamperrin/32/62_2.png) [@grahamperrin](https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/u/grahamperrin)\
**Post date:** [May 13, 2017, 7:08am UTC](https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/t/first-impressions-part-two/147/3 "2017-05-13T07:08:16Z")

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## First impression of a Twitter view of the ‘About’ text

The first visible line:

- is superflous
- promotes the forum in a way that is, I think, **unnecessarily&nbsp;constrained**

 ![](https://canada1.discourse-cdn.com/flex029/uploads/opensourcedesign/original/1X/ae994f68cae518fad286cc7e728c820770987e61.png)

– someone who is neither a designer nor a developer might turn away.

ASAP please: can you reduce that text? Be ruthless. Skip the word ‘community’ (that’s implicit), and so on. Maybe change it from:

> We are a community of designers and developers pushing more open design processes and improving the user experience and interface design of open source software.

– to something like:

> promoting more open design processes • improving the user experience and interface design of open source software

– Unicode U+2022 for the bullet.

I’d like to tell how it will appear in future tweets.

If you need help finding it, for edition: it’s the text that appears at [/about](https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/about) and (yes) you might cringe at the drop from uppercase to lower for the p in promoting, but I suspect that people will more often see the text in the context of e.g. tweets.

> [@Bootstrapping the Open Source Design Discourse community - TODO list](https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/t/bootstrapping-the-open-source-design-discourse-community-todo-list/24/26):
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> I’ll make some more.

(I’ll refrain. Prefer Tweets to look better.)

## Related

> [@Building this community (this forum): defining and stating its purpose](https://discourse.opensourcedesign.net/t/building-this-community-defining-and-stating-its-purpose/23):
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> From READ ME FIRST: Getting Started (for site staff), the first of four points under Building your community: Define your community’s purpose in a pinned or banner topic. Whilst that Staff area is limited access, I’d like that point to be open to the public for discussion. Examples of Discourse presentation of statements of purpose A few hours ago I stumbled across this: For this forum, that type of banner might be effective during a period of transition. Something short and swe…

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